Untitled Sonnet

25 Apr

For day 23 of napowrimo – yes it needs work and more iambic pentametrification, but it’ll do for now!

They met in a field ‘neath mischievous skies
Two tribes, same cause: extinguish the other
None of them was sure of what was the prize
They’d settle for getting home to mother
Battle was joined as the whistle was blown
Onlookers lost all sense of who was who
Muscle and sinew became solid stone
As shouts rent the air and grass and mud flew
Teshub rejoiced as his clouds fed the fray
With cold stinging rain the howling wind cheered
Where they had been flung, casualties lay
At risk of stampede as the maelstrom veered
Tomorrow, memory of war will fade
And time will erase the history made

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9 Responses to “Untitled Sonnet”

  1. Karina Pinella April 25, 2016 at 1:27 pm #

    The battle of the forces! The day no one won.

    • BRH April 25, 2016 at 2:27 pm #

      Does anyone ever win a battle of force? I suppose they sometimes do, but in karmic terms?

      • Karina Pinella April 25, 2016 at 2:51 pm #

        Based on your sonnet, my understanding is no one really won. Yes? No?

      • BRH April 25, 2016 at 3:00 pm #

        Yes – that is correct!

  2. paula graham April 25, 2016 at 4:36 pm #

    No winners and history repeating itself time and time again. So deeply disturbing. Good poem again, as so often.

    • BRH April 25, 2016 at 7:27 pm #

      Thanks Paula!

  3. Poet Rummager April 27, 2016 at 3:25 am #

    Teshub sure gets around! You’re churning out excellent poems. Enjoyed this one; especially the last four lines (I re-read these over and over):

    Where they had been flung, casualties lay
    At risk of stampede as the maelstrom veered
    Tomorrow, memory of war will fade
    And time will erase the history made

    • BRH April 27, 2016 at 7:24 am #

      You brought Teshub to life! Hope you don’t mind me borrowing him. Thanks for your kind words!

      • Poet Rummager April 27, 2016 at 7:26 am #

        Kind? Honest, more like it 😉

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